Ellies 100 word challenge

January 5th, 2015 | Posted by ellieoak12 in Uncategorized

Amazing, pretty, angry A little boy was walking through a swamp he saw this animal in the water but he didn’t know what it was so he walked into the water.The animal creped out of the water and bit his leg and when he jumped out of the water the little boy had some skin missing and his leg was bleeding all all over the side of the swamp. He was shouting mum and dad because he was very hurt he realised that he had his phone in his pocket so he rang his mum and told her the story.

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  • Claire Radd says:

    Hi there, Ellie,

    Well done for entering this week’s 100WC – I enjoyed reading your writing.

    Your story was very fast paced and dramatic – I wonder how the boy felt and what the creature looked like? Do you think you could add these kind of details next time?

    I was very relieved to hear the boy had a phone to ring home – a nearly happy ending!

    Keep up the good work 🙂

    Mrs Radd (Team100WC) Northamptonshire, England.

  • Emma and Gabby says:

    You jumped into the story fast but, I did want to know what was going to happen.

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